Monthly Archives: February 2012

Missing Cities

embalmed in a pyroclastic fate

the burials of Pompeians await

evidence of Atlantis found wanting

ancient city bequeathed to haunting

perhaps Eden resides hidden in

Babylonian gardens, forbidden

these lost cities claimed passion and lives

a legend, with every quest, survives


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Tuesday Writing Tip–Prologues

Earlier this year, prologues were the topic of conversation amidst one of my writing groups.  I thought the topic particularly interesting because my book, Out of the Sea, begins with a prologue.  I thought I would share with you my thoughts on prologues, developed both as a writer and a reader:

1. Prologues can take place at any time.

2. Prologues longer than ~1,000 words often seem excessive.

3. A successful prologue is one or two scenes, tops.  Any more than that, and it’s giving away too much, too soon.

4. Prologues are designed to give your reader necessary background information, or to bait your reader into diving into the first chapter. If your prologue doesn’t accomplish either or both of these goals, it’s not yet finished.

5. Finally, ask others to read your prologue.  Share it with as many people as you care to know their opinions and ask for honest feedback.  Share it with a varied group.  Ask them if anything seems unclear, too draggy, uninteresting, or if they don’t feel compelled to read more of the story.  This will allow you to not only improve your prologue, but also to have a base of readers who will want to read your book.

A few weeks ago I posted my prologue up on my blog.  Feel free to take a peek if you missed it the first time around.  This prologue is the result of several rounds of drafts and critiques.

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Monday Writing Prompt

I’ve heard people tell me they have trouble writing the opposite sex because they can’t get inside those characters’ heads.  It’s the job of every fiction writer to get into each character’s thoughts, however, and so my writing prompt today is designed to help you do just that.

Write a 500 word scene featuring your favorite character–same sex as you–but write him or her as the opposite sex.  When you’ve finished, give the scene to at least two readers–one male, one female–and ask for an honest critique from each. 

This exercise will help you begin to bridge over any discomfort you might currently feel.  For me, I now prefer writing male characters to female characters simply for the challenge.  I’d love to read what you write–feel free to send it to me.  I promise to offer a kind, honest critique.

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Sunday Writing News

Developing a writing career, whether part time or full, is at the least, 70% marketing.  This week I built my Facebook page.  I hope, dear reader, that you will feel free to use this outlet to stay in touch with me.  I’m most interested in knowing what my readers like to read, what they think of anything I post and what they might want to see on my blog.

This week I will get another step closer to publishing my first poetry anthology.  I will let you in on a little secret–my true goal is to have it up and ready for public consumption within two weeks.  I’ve been working on it for awhile, and there is little remaining to accomplish.

Regarding Out of the Sea, I’m still working on my edits & rewrites.  By the end of this month, I’ll be 1/5 through.  So I have to pick it up a little bit to make my April 30 goal, but I think it’s still very much within my grasp.

Finally, the last part of Snowed In will be posted up this Friday.  Who do you think the killer is?

Edit: I apologize that this post did not get published at noon today. It was my own fault–I entered the wrong publishing time by mistake.  

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Snowed In, Part Three

David spent the next hour pacing his room, typewriter and the promise of a story for Miss Walker forgotten. I’ve known Mr. Barrow for three years now, I think I would have spotted if he was a killer. Thinking back on those years, he cataloged what he knew of the man. Mr. Barrow often woke early, ate breakfast early and left for work early. He worked long hours, often not returning until nine or ten at night, when the rest of the house was turning in. On weekends, he talked about the stories he had in the works, with a knowing smile and a secretive whisper. David only saw him lose his temper once in the last three years, when another journalist scooped his story. Even then, he didn’t think Mr. Barrow capable of murder, and he couldn’t imagine Tommy trying to pull a fast one on Mr. Barrow.

Yes, Tommy was a headstrong boy, David assessed. But even Miss Walker, who was ever gentle in her criticisms, claimed that Tommy’s strongest skills did not include the written word. That Mr. Barrow would murder anyone, least of all Tommy, was an impossibility in David’s estimation. Tommy did not take his own life, he thought, repeating the words in his head like a puzzled mantra.

David left his room again and went to the common room down the hall. The only sounds emanating from the room was the rustling of newspaper and the wind, but the wind was present everywhere today. “McCullough,” he greeted, attempting a non-committal sort of friendly tone, though he worried his voice sounded a little too high not to come across as nervous. Clearing his throat, he added, “Just the fellow I was hoping to see.”

McCullough looked up from the paper, which stretched suspended between his scrubbed-clean hands. Did they move Tommy? Or was he scrubbing them clean from something else? David wished he’d bothered to notice when he saw him earlier in the stairwell. When he said nothing, David moved into the room and hovered near one of the two sofas before ultimately deciding it was best to remain standing. He rested his arm upon the mantlepiece. “What were you up to after breakfast,” he asked curiously. “I mean, did you see anything odd, or, did Tommy seem strange?”

McCullough laughed, throwing his head back. “You want to know if I thought Tommy seemed strange? All of you seem strange—I only just arrived here, after all.”

David felt his face heat up. He’s trying to make me look like a fool. “Very well, I can see that…but did you see him, at any rate?”

“So you’re playing detective now, are you? Yes, I saw him. I was sitting here, looking for job postings—as I’m doing now—and saw him walk by toward the stairs. I presumed he was going up to his room.”

Frowning, David pressed on. “Did you speak to him, or vice versa?” He decided to ignore McCullough’s snide remark about playing detective. I need to pick my battles, he determined, and finding out about Tommy was more important.

“No, we didn’t speak. Look, I’ll say it plain: I didn’t kill the lad. Maybe you did.” McCullough lifted the newspaper again; his face disappeared behind its pages.

David bristled. His back straightened and he felt his shoulders tense like a giant was pressing them together with its vice-hands. “I did no such thing.” Walking from the room, he decided McCullough must have killed Tommy, and was now trying to turn the tables around on him. I have to warn Miss Walker. But Miss Walker wasn’t in her room, or, if she was, she didn’t answer when David knocked five minutes later. He checked Tommy’s room too. He even went to his room to look outside, hoping she’d not decided to brave the weather in hopes of finding Mr. Barrow or the police.

The snow swirled so fast that he might as well have been staring at a white wall. He caught sight of a flake or two, but only for a second before it flitted back into the flock of weather. Pressing his nose to the cold glass, David squinted his eyes in an effort to see better, but with no success. He turned from the window with a sigh and jumped several inches into the air when he saw her standing in his doorway. “Miss—Miss Walker.”

“I was resting. I figured it was you knocking on my door because McCullough’s in the common room and says it wasn’t him.”

“Are you alright,” David crossed his room toward her, welcoming her in from the doorway. “Please, sit.” He pulled his desk chair into the middle of the room and gently guided her into the seat.

“After what happened with Tommy…I went back to my room for awhile. I was starting to doze off. I…can’t believe you just found him like that.” She looked down at her hands, folded neatly in her lap.

“I wish I hadn’t.” David lowered himself onto the edge of his bed. “Miss Walker, I think McCullough was responsible for Tommy’s death.”

“I know,” she answered instantly, eyes darting up to meet his gaze from across the room. “You defended Mr. Barrow so vehemently.”

“But you think it could have been him?”

She shrugged. “I don’t know. How well do we really know people?” Miss Walker sniffed at the air. “Do you smell burning?”

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Thursday Blog Roll: Lantern Hollow Press

    Normally I would try to go for an individual writer.  However, Lantern Hollow Press    grabbed my attention with their post about writer’s block.  Maybe it was the charming photos, or maybe the recipe for chocolate cake in a mug (I’m seriously going to make that the next time I want to write and it’s earlier than ten o’clock at night).  They offer book reviews, tips and news about new releases.  Whether you consider yourself a writer, avid reader, or both, you’ll want to check out this blog.

At the very least, make the chocolate cake in a mug.

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Ancient Scrolls


pediments carve out the sky

like paper dolls

library windows

peek into trees

and crumbling stones

chipped steps

genuflect before

Corinthian columns

the leaves’ delicate lace

long forgotten

marble sentries

watch floods of foreigners

come to gawk

at the lone wall

famous for its longevity

the façade towers over Ephesus

a beacon for bibliophiles

who seek connections

to their past

before books were leaves

sewn and bound


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Tuesday Writing Tip: Finding Flaws

Characters who grab your readers’ attentions are flawed characters.  No one wants to cheer for someone who’s utterly perfect all the time.  Think on the tragic hero–so much more likable and approachable for his or her (in the case of tragic heroines) flaw or flaws.  So how do you create flawed characters?  You don’t need to go overboard.

Typically, I try to think of a physical flaw and a less tangible flaw for each character…at least.  Just as with people, some have more flaws than others, and some more severe.  For each flaw, you must develop the reason for its existence.  Perhaps if your character is someone who carries a sense of entitlement, he or she was spoiled as a child.  Or perhaps the opposite is true, and his or her sibling was spoiled instead.

Flaws don’t just make your characters more approachable.  They give them something to overcome or perhaps accept.  Flaws can become a major player in your story, in addition to helping your characters to step off of the page.

Discussion: What is your favorite character flaw and why?  

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Monday Writing Prompt

Who is your favorite literary character?  Take that character, and write him or her into a scene in your own story.  Of course, you can’t ever publish that scene and take credit for the character (unless you want to go the Pride, Prejudice and Zombies route).  However, allowing your characters to interact with one of your favorites can produce a number of favorable results, including (but not limited to):

1. Jump starting your writing if you’ve been a bit blocked

2. Fleshing out features and traits of your own characters

3. Having a bit of fun

If you’re part of a writing group, try asking everyone to agree upon a famous character and see how each of you write him or her.

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Sunday Writing News

This week I’ve devoted much of my creative energy toward thought.  April, the month when I begin writing my next book (by hand), is fast approaching.  Oh, it may not seem as though it is, but already February is two thirds over.  I know the basic premise I want to employ for my next book but I have yet to commit to a plot–and nail down the actual events of the story.

I have made the decision though that I will create characters on both sides of the Crusades, and use their point of views to tell the story, whatever it works out to be.  What I”m still debating though is whether to have two from each side or one.  I would like it to be balanced, so I don’t think I’ll go with one from one side and two from the other.

For me, I must always develop the characters and then the plot.  I think this week, my goal for that story will be to determine:

1. Which Crusade I use for the backdrop of my story

2. Basic information for my characters, including their motivations.  Perhaps next week I’ll post up character sheets for them.

In other news, I’ve firmed up some information that I believe was holding me back from progressing with my rewrite of Out of the Sea.  I think this week I’ll be able to continue as planned, and complete the rewrites for chapters one and three.

Along with the next bit of “Snowed In” and a new poem, I think I should be fairly busy this week!

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